Proceeding with Caution

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Title: Proceeding with Caution
Author: shegollum
Rating: G
Warnings: None
Prompt(s): #15: a picture of 'slow' painted on the street
Disclaimer: Completely and totally untrue and written only for fun and certainly not for profit or other personal gain.



I saw your apprehension but no denial. I waited, not moving forward but never backing away, ever hopeful and full of want. Your smiles were questions paired with challenges; maybe you never knew that. I came to you - slowly, cautiously, fearing your fear. The graze of my shoulder against yours, the slide of my fingers across your wrist, lingering to feel the rapid beat of your pulse. I drew away when others approached, careful only for you, but you pulled me back, laughing. I came toward you slowly but when I did, you met me with an unguarded heart.

Comments

[stormatdusk.livejournal.com]

careful only for you

i read it twice, with a different man in first person each time, and it works beautiful both ways.

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

that's cool! i love it when it comes across in that way. so glad you liked it!

[bluegerl.livejournal.com]

Yes, it works both ways - beautifully, gently. Seems so true....

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

thank you so much. i like it when they can be read either way like that.

[j-flattermann.livejournal.com]

Hmm, I am speechless. How beautiful.
I came toward you slowly but when I did, you met me with an unguarded heart.
That totally does it for me. Thank you for this lovely drabble.

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

i am so happy that you liked it. thank you so much for the wonderful feedback. *hugs*

[alex-quine.livejournal.com]

There is hope that demands caution, lest something fragile and precious be shattered by rough handling, and calculation, tiny steps forward - but when that final step is made the reply is total, open, simple, honest, true.

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

thank you so much for your feedback. i love how you've described the evolution of that kind of relationship. beautiful!

[helena-s-renn.livejournal.com]

damn, woman, i don't know how you're doing it. everything you turn out these days is pure genius, pure gold.

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

oh my goodness! what a way to start my morning with a big smile. thank you for such generous feedback. *hugs*

[govi20.livejournal.com]

What a lovely, lovely drabble. made me feel warm all over. Great job!

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

aw, thank you. i really appreciate the feedback!

(have you rugbytackled mooms yet? *g*)

[helena-s-renn.livejournal.com]

is the "i" in this one viggo? or should i not ask?

anyway, the feeling of caution and warmth felt like the beginning of something.

[shegollum.livejournal.com]

well, i had one of them in mind at first, but can run it back through my mind with them switching roles (so to speak *g*) and i can picture it that way as well, so i'd probably say 'not necessarily'. :-)

[mooms.livejournal.com]

I love it, especially the last line and yes, I think it works both ways!

[savageseraph.livejournal.com]

I love the way this builds, how evocative the touching is, the tug of drawing back and being pulled forward. Nice!!!

[caras-galadhon.livejournal.com]

Quite, quite lovely. I love the caution in this piece, and I love "fearing your fear." What a great turn of phrase!

[foxrafer.livejournal.com]

This is so beautiful, full of so much care and promise.

Your smiles were questions paired with challenges
Wonderful line.